IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

The chart below gives information on the percentages of British people giving money to charity by range for the years 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information on the percentages of British people giving money to charity by range for the years 1990 and 2010.
#information #percentages #british #people #money #charity #range #years
The bar chart illustrates the data on the proportion of
people
 in
United
Correct article usage
the United
show examples
 Kingdom giving money to charity between 1990 and 2010
Overall
, it can be seen that
people
 in 36-50 give money to charity
higest
Correct your spelling
highest
 on the chart approximately
by
Change preposition
apply
show examples
42
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
 in 1999 and the less were
people
 in 18-25 years
percent
 of
donate
Wrong verb form
donated
show examples
 just under 10.
In addition
, in 1990 18-25 were around 17
percent
 and
fallen
Wrong verb form
fell
show examples
 significantly in 2010 to 7
percent
.
Then
 28-35
donate
Change the form of the verb
donated
show examples
 in 1990 and 2010 get a downward trend has
percent
 32, 24 respectively and
adlut
Correct your spelling
adult
people
 (36-50)
reach
Wrong verb form
reached
show examples
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 peak in 1990
over
Change preposition
at over
show examples
 40
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
while
2010
Change preposition
in 2010
show examples
 decreased to 24
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
.
Moreover
, old
people
 (51-65) started in 1990 giving money to charity 35
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
 and
grow
Wrong verb form
grew
show examples
up
Change preposition
by
show examples
 almost 40
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
.
finally
, over 65 years was lower at 33
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
 in 1990, but it
was little go
Change the verb form
was little going
show examples
 up to 35
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
 in 2010.
Submitted by kunlacha.kp on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words people, percent with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: