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Write a letter to your friends. In your letter: ● Thank them for the holiday and the photos. ● Explain why you didn’t write earlier. ● Invite them to come and stay with you.

#friends #holiday #photos #didn’t
Dear Amir, The
time
 that spent in your home was memorable, and I have not
forgoten
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forgotten
 forever.
Tthe
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 best
time
 that I have with you and your family.
also
,
taste
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the taste
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 of cookies which your wife
make
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 for tea
time
were
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 the best of
time
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 that I have ever experienced. The reason why I love your home is
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the freindly
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freindly
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friendly
 atmosphere. In fact, I
so
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 sorry to write
letter
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 to you
aftet
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after
 2 months. When I arrived home I
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 to
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prepare
critical
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 report for my CEO,
also
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times
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 at work
to do
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 my project to illustrate to managers.
furtunetly
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fortunately
 I
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finished
 the project and nowadays I have free
time
,
due to
this
 reason I invited you to my house to have
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time
 with each other. Namely ,spent our free
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playing golf in A complex. I am looking forward to hearing from you and
have
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having
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nice
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a nice
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time
 with you. Have
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time
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coherence cohesion
To improve the logical structure of your letter, try to clearly separate the introduction, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph should have a clear purpose and flow smoothly into the next.
coherence cohesion
When beginning and ending your letter, using formal or semi-formal greetings and closings can improve the overall impression. For example, start with 'Dear Amir,' and close with 'Kind regards,' followed by your name.
coherence cohesion
Maintaining a single idea per paragraph helps with clarity and readability. You've done a good job here; continue to organize your writing in this way.
task achievement
Ensure your response is complete by addressing all the bullet points in the prompt. This includes elaborating on each point with enough detail to make your intentions clear.
task achievement
Using a suitable writing tone involves matching the formality of the situation. For a letter to a friend, a friendly and warm tone is appropriate. Mind the use of formal and informal language properly; avoid mixing formal expressions in an informal letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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