Many people in poor countries die from diseases that are curable because they cannot afford the medication required. Do you believe that drug companies should make their products available at reduced prices in these countries?
With the advancement in medical technology, the average life expectancy is increasing worldwide.
However
, people in some areas still have premature death
because of the unaffordable price of healthcare. There is Fix the agreement mistake
deaths
also
a debate on whether Correct article usage
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the
pharmaceutical Correct article usage
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companies
should lower the Change noun form
drugs
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drugs
drugs'
prices in Fix the agreement mistake
drug'
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the
undeveloped Correct article usage
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countries
. In my opinion, I believe that the companies
should reduce the cost of their products in some countries
. This
essay will cover arguments that support my view.
Firstly
, the companies
also
gain a profit from more access to the
medicine, as in more income. Correct article usage
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For instance
, the
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countries
normally have a large number of
population Correct quantifier usage
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due to
less
alternatives in reproduction control methods, the lower price can Change the quantifier
fewer
resulted
in millions of Change the verb form
result
customer
in return, which possibly make a large sum of Fix the agreement mistake
customers
millions
dollars. Add the preposition
millions of
Hence
, they could still produce the same amount of profit with altered price
in some areas.
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prices
Moreover
, another benefit is more data on the medicine
effectiveness, which they can Change noun form
medicine's
further
research and develop the formula. As
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In
countries
located in Asia and Africa, the efficacy and potency of drugs can be different between races. Therefore
, with more access to the
medicine, there will be a large amount of useful information that can be gathered to develop better products.
In conclusion, Correct article usage
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the
pharmacy Correct article usage
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companies
still have other form of benefits from lowering the prices, such
as more customers and income, and an opportunity to acquire the information that can be used to create a better product, which I personally think that
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it
is Correct pronoun usage
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worth
comparable to the profit they have lost for.Correct word choice
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