It is suggested that primary children should learn how to grow vegetables and keep animals. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
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children
are necessary for taking Use synonyms
knowledge
of how to grow Use synonyms
vegetables
and keep Use synonyms
animals
as Use synonyms
a pets
.In the forthcoming paragraph, I will explain why these learning things Correct the article-noun agreement
pets
a pet
advantages
over disadvantages.
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have advantages
To begin
with,Learning ability in primary school Linking Words
children
is very high because they have on initial growth of mind and physical they are curious for learning something new if Use synonyms
teacher
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the teacher
a teacher
is try
to educate Change the verb form
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children
about how to grow Use synonyms
vegetables
and keep animal as a pet or for other uses Use synonyms
then
it helps for Linking Words
children
to come across the reality of Use synonyms
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vegetables
growth and their every aspect like in which type of protein vegetable have and it helps for Change the noun form
vegetable
children
in future for making a career in the agricultural field and distribute Use synonyms
knowledge
to other people,Use synonyms
on the other hand
keeping Linking Words
animals
as a pet help Use synonyms
kids
to come out from being an introvert person.It Use synonyms
also
helps Linking Words
kids
to like and care Use synonyms
someone
is very important and it Change preposition
for someone
also
helps them to make relationships strongly and usefully in future.
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On the other hand
,If Linking Words
children
learn how to grow Use synonyms
vegetables
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then
they miss the importance of other subjects but if teachers and parents manage their studies Linking Words
then
it can be helpful for Linking Words
kids
to grow with Use synonyms
this
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knowledge
.If we talk about Use synonyms
animal
keeping Fix the agreement mistake
animals
animals
is very dangerous for primary school Use synonyms
kids
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due to
the fact that Linking Words
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probably injure them with their nails and teeth but it's not true some Use synonyms
animals
are Use synonyms
also
very friendly Linking Words
nature
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in nature
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and animal Correct word choice
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a past eras
.So,If Correct the article-noun agreement
past eras
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kids
try to gain Use synonyms
knowledge
of animal behaviour or teachers teach them how to keep Use synonyms
animals
safe Use synonyms
then
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animals
not harm Use synonyms
children
and anyone else ever.
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To sum up
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Children
gain Use synonyms
knowledge
from extra like how to grow Use synonyms
vegetables
and keep Use synonyms
animals
is very useful for their present and future Use synonyms
aspect
.It helps them to grow naturally and behaviorally.Fix the agreement mistake
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