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On one hand, nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. On the other hand, nuclear weapons are a potent threat to world peace. Do the benefits of nuclear technology outweigh the risks? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nuclear
technologies
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 is a topic that always
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, because there are a lot of benefits of
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 technology,
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, at the same time there are risks that humanity
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facing
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 using nuclear innovations.
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, nuclear power generates cheap and
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clean
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energy
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, that can provide
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 of
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 and
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 not harm
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eco system
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ecosystem
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. On
other
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 hand, nuclear technologies are the most dangerous productions, that have been ever created.
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,
energy
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 in nowadays world is the main resource to humanity. Irreversible fuels are expensive to get,
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,
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the proccess
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proccess
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process
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nature.
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predicting
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 that fuels will be demolished and countries that do not have renewable
energy
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 resources will struggle economically and politically and may depend
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neighbors
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.
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, countries that prefer to invest
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a
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nuclear
energy
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 are the most economically and financially developed ones.
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, nuclear technologies are dangerous, and history remembers
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horrible
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 when nuclear technology killed thousands of
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. Nuclear
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 stations should be highly preserved to prevent any mistake,
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 accidents may be a reason and in
fact
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for
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a worldwide tragedy. 1986 witnessed an accident at the nuclear
energy
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 station in
USSR
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the USSR
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, a lot of
people
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 died
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this
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 day
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 or lived with
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 consequences,
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 place where
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energy
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 station was located is still closed for
people
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 to visit. In conclusion, nuclear power is the most innovative technology,
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however
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 it is hard to handle that much
energy
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. Even so, nuclear
energy
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, if
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it
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correctly, would be an answer
for
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power
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the power
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 problem.

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logical structure
Focus on a clearer structure for your essay with an introduction, well-developed paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should start with a clear topic sentence that is then elaborated with arguments and examples.
introduction conclusion present
Ensure your introduction and conclusion are clearly distinct and summarize your argument effectively. The introduction should present the topic and your stance briefly, while the conclusion should restate your position and summarize the key points made.
supported main points
Support each of your main points with more detailed examples and explanations. Consider using real-life examples, statistics, or studies to make your argument more convincing.
complete response
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clear comprehensive ideas
Work on clearly presenting your ideas and arguments. Use simple and direct language where possible and ensure your reasoning is easy to follow.
relevant specific examples
Include more relevant and specific examples to strengthen your arguments. These examples should directly support the point you're making and be detailed enough to add value to your argument.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear power
  • Cheap and clean energy
  • Nuclear weapons
  • Threat to world peace
  • Benefits
  • Risks
  • Potent threat
  • Deterrence
  • Security
  • Accidents
  • Disasters
  • Misuse
  • Balancing
  • Strict regulations
  • International cooperation
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