The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration below displays how the
sugar
is manufactured from sugar
cane.
Overall
, there are 7 stages in the diagram, commencing with cultivating sugar
cane, crops harvested, and finishing with sugar
dried and cooled in the process.
To be specific, sugar
canes initially
need 12 to 18 months to become mature. Once the plants have grown sufficiently, some are harvested by farmers, others by machines. In the next state, sugar
is placed in a machine which crushes the sugar
canes to separate the juice from the stems. After being crushed, the remaining juice undergoes purification using a limestone filter to remove impurities.
Next,
the purifying juice is heated in a large pot, accelerating the evaporation process to make it become syrup. Following that is
another separating stage where syrup is removed and sugar
crystals are extracted by the centrifuge. Finally
, the sugar
is dried and cooled in the big container.Submitted by Chloe on
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