You are interested in attending a short course at a college in an English speaking country. Write a letter to the college administration. In the letter: •mention what course you would like to attend •give details about your educational background and work experience •say why you choose this college
Dear Sir ,
I am writing
this
letter to know about the availability of the management course
from The
Cambridge College which is very popular for international students.
I have done my graduate in computer science from Guru Nana Dev University which is situated in India , Correct article usage
apply
currently
I Add a comma
currently,
am
working with Wrong verb form
have been
international
company in Correct article usage
an international
IT
department Correct article usage
the IT
past
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for past
from
two years. My manager Change preposition
apply
give
me a suggestion to complete Wrong verb form
gave
this
course
which will help me to polish my skills and talent and allow me to work with professional
attitude. Add an article
a professional
Moreover
, work ethics are really important in my job therefore
, I become more familiar with it through this
course
.
I choose
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chose
this
college because my cousin told me about the teaching methods of this
college which are majestic and spectacular . He has done his degree from the same premise and he is an operational manager in the well know
company which is based in England.
Let me know when the full details of Correct your spelling
a well-known
this
course
so, I can join as soon as possible. I am looking forward to hearing from you .
Yours faithfully,
JaiSubmitted by Kaurharvinder2984 on
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Task Achievement
Consider using a more formal greeting (e.g., 'Dear [Position/Name],' instead of a generic 'Dear Sir ,'). Additionally, include a proper closing before your name, such as 'Yours sincerely' aligned with the tone of the letter.
Task Achievement
Ensure the correct use of punctuation, especially commas and periods. Spaces should follow punctuation marks, not precede them (e.g., 'Dear Sir,' instead of 'Dear Sir ,').
Coherence & Cohesion
Structure your letter clearly by introducing each topic in separate paragraphs. Start with your interest in the course, follow with your background, and conclude with why you've chosen the college. This was done reasonably well, but could be more strategically emphasized.
Coherence & Cohesion
Enhance the coherence of your letter by connecting ideas more smoothly. Use transition words or phrases to create better flow between sentences and paragraphs. For instance, 'Additionally,' 'Furthermore,' 'Therefore,' can help in creating a smoother transition.