You are having a graduation party next Saturday night. You have invited 50 people to celebrate at an outdoor barbecue evening, which may continue till late night.Write a letter to your elderly neighbour. In your letter: explain what will be happening offer your apologies in advance invite him/her to visit your house someday

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Dear Mr. Smith, I hope

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letter finds you in a radiant of health and great spirits. I am writing his letter to inform you that I will throw a party for my graduation which will held

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next Saturday. I have invited 50 people

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my family members and friends who are super excited and ecstatic for my amazing performance in my studies . I arranged everything like food , drinks

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a DJ

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night

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bit

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noisy

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the loud music and I want to

apologies

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in advance because you will face inconvenience . I did a lot of hard work to achieve an excellent grade

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party is a reward

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my sleepless nights

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, it will act as a stress buster for me . I want you to invite

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my place whenever you have time you can come

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way , I can share my experiences with you which allow us to make our bond strong. Once again accept my sincere apologies and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jai

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Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure each paragraph presents a clear, central idea, focusing on explaining the event, the reason for the inconvenience, and the invitation separately for enhanced clarity.

Task Achievement

Aim to provide more detailed information about the event such as the start time or any specific activities planned, which would enhance the completeness of your response.

General Advice

Minor grammatical and punctuation errors can impact the readability of your letter. Consider proofreading to identify and correct these issues.

Task Achievement

Including a specific invitation time for your neighbor and conveying gratitude for their understanding could add a personal touch and improve the tone of your letter.

Coherence and Cohesion

Use paragraphs effectively to separate different ideas and make your letter easier to follow.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

186 words

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