You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The two bar charts
illutrate
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illustrate
the destination of
UK
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students
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after leaving college in 2008.The first bar displays the
UK
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graduates
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graduate's
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destination and the second bar shows the
UK
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postgraduates
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postgraduate's
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destination namely part-time
work
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,voluntary
work
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,
further
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study and unemployment . As seen from the chart above ,most of the
student
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students
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from both bars
seen to
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apply
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go for
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further
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the further
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study option with
total
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a total
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29,665
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of 29,665
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and 2,725
students
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, respectively.
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, fewer
students
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choose
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in
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apply
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voluntary
work
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with
total
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a total
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only
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of only
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3,845
students
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after
completed
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completing
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their
acedemic
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academics
.Next ,part-time
work
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is second in trends for the
UK
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students
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to pick with figures of 17,735 and 2,535
students
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each.
Suprisingly
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, after
left
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leaving
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the
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college ,
many
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a many
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number of
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apply
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students
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are still hardly finding
their
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a
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job
and
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which
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make
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made
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them
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an
umemployment
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unemployment
in 2008 with a number of 17,860 in total .
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, both graduates will continue to increase their knowledge and skills by
further
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their
study
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studies
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, students, work with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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