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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the numer of new shops that opened in one coutry between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the in formation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant,

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the numer of new shops that opened in one coutry between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the in formation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant,
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The line graph illustrates data regarding how many
shops
 closed and
number
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a number
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 of new
shops
 which were opened in the same country over 7 years , from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
 , it is clear from the graph that in 2015 a huge number of markets were closed.
Also
, the worst
indicatosrs
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indicators
indicator
 of openings of
shops
 were in 2018. On the one hand, in early 2011 years around 8500
shops
 opened .
Then
 the statistics
werer
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were
 dramatically
fallen
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fell
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 to 4000. After which openings started to rise negligibly , it was
rosen
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risen
 to about 5300. After
few
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a few
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 years all the showings were
leveled
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 off .
On the other hand
, closures
begun
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 to rise
from
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in
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 2012, it got to the top in 2013, but
then
number
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a number
the number
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 of
closes
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closures
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were
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plunged to around 500, in 2015. Next , in 2016 markets began to close just above 5000 and
then
 numbers stabilized.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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