The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the numer of new shops that opened in one coutry between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the in formation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant,

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The line graph illustrates data regarding how many

shops

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closed and

number

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a number

the number

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of new

shops

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which were opened in the same country over 7 years , from 2011 to 2018.

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, it is clear from the graph that in 2015 a huge number of markets were closed.

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, the worst

indicatosrs

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indicators

indicator

of openings of

shops

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were in 2018. On the one hand, in early 2011 years around 8500

shops

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opened .

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the statistics

werer

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were

dramatically

fallen

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fell

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to 4000. After which openings started to rise negligibly , it was

rosen

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risen

to about 5300. After

few

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a few

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years all the showings were

leveled

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levelled

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off .

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, closures

begun

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began

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to rise

from

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2012, it got to the top in 2013, but

then

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number

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a number

the number

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closes

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closures

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were

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apply

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plunged to around 500, in 2015. Next , in 2016 markets began to close just above 5000 and

then

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numbers stabilized.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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148 words

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