Some university offer online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus. Do you think this is a positive or negative development

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the pandemic of Coronavirus in 2019
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effected
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the globe in many ways of learning and methods of delivery in many institutions namely online courses .
However
, I believe that there
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both
positive and negative developments of
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.
To begin
with ,one of the benefits of
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is the
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flexibility
that is
very convenient for
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tutors and students because they can choose
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and date for the courses.
For instance
,a single mother who is hardly to leave their house can easily join online classes to learn cooking sessions.
Besides
that ,online courses are more cheaper than
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.
For example
,students with limited financial support
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to
further
their studies by entering online
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is more
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compared to physical
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.
In contrast
,the
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of
this
development is the lack of
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interaction between two
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.It is important for students and
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institutions to have effective learning outcomes and real materials to deliver a better learning process.
For example
,there
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always some barriers
such
as technology problems that will affect the learning and teaching process.
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Consequently
,
both
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will suffer the
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in time and money .
In addition
,if
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alternative delivery ways of learning continue to approach
then
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will slowly have an
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on
profession
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such
as
teacher
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teachers
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.
For instance
, only one tutor
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to teach an online class compared to physical classes need more
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one person to teach several classes
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the
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campus. In conclusion , I think
this
development
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both
good and bad results.
Although
,considering the time and money saving but
also
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social interaction between the teacher and the disciple.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual learning environment
  • asynchronous and synchronous learning
  • massive open online courses (MOOCs)
  • pedagogical approaches
  • cognitive engagement
  • digital literacy
  • academic rigor
  • collaborative platforms
  • student-centric learning
  • multimedia resources
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