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Some university offer online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus. Do you think this is a positive or negative development

#university #offer #courses #alternative #classes #campus #development
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There is no doubt that
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the pandemic of Coronavirus in 2019
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effected
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 the globe in many ways of learning and methods of delivery in many institutions namely online courses .
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 , I believe that there
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both
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 positive and negative developments of
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trends
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 is the
flexibilty
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flexibility
that is
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 tutors and students because they can choose
time
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 and date for the courses.
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 ,a single mother who is hardly to leave their house can easily join online classes to learn cooking sessions.
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 that ,online courses are more cheaper than
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 to
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 their studies by entering online
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 is more
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 compared to physical
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.
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 of
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 development is the lack of
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 interaction between two
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.It is important for students and
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institutions to have effective learning outcomes and real materials to deliver a better learning process.
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 always some barriers
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 as technology problems that will affect the learning and teaching process.
Consenquently
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Consequently
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party
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 will suffer the
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 in time and money .
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 ,if
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 alternative delivery ways of learning continue to approach
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 will slowly have an
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 on
profession
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such
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teacher
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teachers
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 to teach an online class compared to physical classes need more
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then
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 one person to teach several classes
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the
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campus. In conclusion , I think
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 development
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both
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 good and bad results.
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effects
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 social interaction between the teacher and the disciple.
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Task Achievement
Ensure all your ideas are fully developed and directly related to the question asked. In some cases, you presented ideas without full elaboration, such as how online learning directly impacts teachers' professions. Providing specific reasons or examples can help clarify your points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on structuring your essay more clearly. Each paragraph should have a single focus, with a clear topic sentence that introduces the paragraph's main idea. This helps the reader follow your argument more effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to avoid spelling and grammatical errors by proofreading your essay. Errors like 'have effected' instead of 'have affected' and 'more cheaper' instead of 'cheaper' can distract from your message and lower your score.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual learning environment
  • asynchronous and synchronous learning
  • massive open online courses (MOOCs)
  • pedagogical approaches
  • cognitive engagement
  • digital literacy
  • academic rigor
  • collaborative platforms
  • student-centric learning
  • multimedia resources
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