Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?
Many
museums
sell taxes
to enter the museum while
others do not sell any tax end it lets people
to
enter for free. There are many advantages and disadvantages of selling Change the verb form
apply
taxes
to people
for admission to museums
. This
essay will discuss my opinion and both sides of this
issue.
On the one hand, there are many types of museums
such
as traditional historical and natural but famous types of all types can get investment from the government and others cannot get enough investment as much as famous museums
. Thus
, there is no way except to charge
for admission to supply their projects. , they can earn money from the charges ,and they can do development which can be the best way to free people
's attention because monotony makes people
bored. For example
, some people
recognize the surroundings rather than museum exhibits. In my opinion, if taxes
are not expensive, people
pay for it and enjoy it.
On the other hand
, some people
who want these places must not have the charge
, in case , a group of men argued with the museum guards and caused a riot because of the charge
for admission. In my opinion, there are many people
like this
group of men and the charge
can decrease the number of people
who visit museums
. In addition
, some children like visiting galleries cannot pay the cost of charge
and it can make them sad.
To conclude
, I think that museums
should monitor the cost of taxes
. They can earn certain money from this
and they do development because they need to satisfy the paying people
.Submitted by buyabuya201 on
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