The graph below gives information abouth the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information abouth the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The bar chart below illustrates what is the proportion of four different
countries
( Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and
Indonesia
) from 1970 to 2020, with
prediction
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from the next two decades.
Overall
, as can be seen in the line chart, all four
countries
, until 2040, follow an upward trend. In 1970, Thailand and
Indonesia
were the only two
countries
with
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percentage of the population under 20 per
cent
,
where
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in 2020, Thailand had increased to 10 per
cent
, and
Indonesia
almost tripled the number of people, reaching 50 per
cent
. Meanwhile, at the beginning of the period, the Philippines and Malaysia
,
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started at approximately 30 per
cent
, and after
the
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two decades slightly less than 50 per
cent
. For the next 20 years, the Philippines suffered a decrease, but by the end of the period, based on projection, the percentage should reach slightly over 50 per
cent
. Based on the graph, by 2040, all four
countries
will have a rise, but only
Indonesia
and Malaysia will reach more than 50 per
cent
and respectively 80 per
cent
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