Some people think that punishment is the best way of teaching children to behave well. Others believe that it is better to reward children for good be haviour. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is a common thought that punishment is the best
way
to teach children
for
good Change preposition
apply
behavior
, but Change the spelling
behaviour
the
others Correct article usage
apply
belief
that Replace the word
believe
give
Change the verb form
gives
children
present
when they have good Replace the word
presence
behavior
. Change the spelling
behaviour
While
there are admitted several benefit
when Change to a plural noun
benefits
punish
Change the verb form
punishing
childrent
for teaching Correct your spelling
children
children
, but I believe that the best way
to teach them is give
Change the verb form
to give
giving
children
their reward
for their behave
well.
There are several Change the verb form
behaves
reason
why people choose to punish Change to a plural noun
reasons
children
for teaching. For one, the key rationable
behind Correct your spelling
rationale
this
thoght
is that Correct your spelling
thought
though
children
do not listen to their parent
, so they need to choose that Fix the agreement mistake
parents
way
. In fact, some family
have Fix the agreement mistake
families
children
have
wrong Correct pronoun usage
who have
behavior
when they teach them Change the spelling
behaviour
for
good Change preposition
apply
behavior
they choose to Change the spelling
behaviour
opposing
, Change the verb
oppose
arguing
and even Wrong verb form
argue
fighting
with their own parents. Wrong verb form
fight
In addition
to this
, choose
to punish them may make them Wrong verb form
choosing
know
fear their parents and be forced to obey. Verb problem
apply
As a result
, there will be families who abuse this
, leading to child abuse. In addition
, if the punishment is too harsh, it can affect the child's psychology.
On the other hand
, if parent choose
teach their child by Add the particle
choose to
give
them Change the verb form
giving
present
when they have good Correct article usage
a present
behavior
can make them try to Change the spelling
behaviour
be have
good Correct your spelling
behave
behave
. It must Replace the word
behaviour
fist
be recognized that Correct your spelling
first
children
may try to behave well for their reward
, they will know that if they have good behavior
and make their Change the spelling
behaviour
parent
proud of them they will have their Fix the agreement mistake
parents
reward
. This
argument is futher
Correct your spelling
further
fortificed
by the fact that Correct your spelling
fortified
choose
Wrong verb form
choosing
this
way
to teach children
can help them know which behavior
is wrong and which Change the spelling
behaviour
behavior
is true.
In conclusion, Change the spelling
behaviour
while
it is true to some extent that the best Correct your spelling
way
wway
to teach Correct your spelling
way
children
behavior
is punishment, I would maintain that the best Change the spelling
behaviour
way
to teach them is make
them know Change the verb form
to make
which
is good and which is bad and give them their Correct pronoun usage
what
reward
when they have well behavior
Change the spelling
behaviour
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