Many people around the world use social media every day to keep in touch with other people get news events. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
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On the other hand
, there are also
some drawbacks of social media
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face-to-face
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to chatting
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As a result
, they do not share the same kind of bond that they did earlier. Secondly
, there is a lot of misinformation being spread on the internet. There is no way to authenticate what is true and what is false. For instance
, a piece of false news
was spread on WhatsApp that people
from a particular part of India were being killed in Bangalore. This
led a lot of people
from that region leaving
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although
nothing of such
nature happened in reality.
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