Many people around the world use social media every day to keep in touch with other people get news events. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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facilities in order to maintain contact with friends or relatives,
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with the mentioned viewpoint and will explain why during the essays. First and foremost,
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and development of each country. Not only reduce
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many companies have responsibilities to launch
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so as to introduce
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the benefits of mobile phones or laptops.
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we should use social
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news
events. Social
media
is an important source of
news
, more timely and flexible than traditional
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. Any online post can be immediately
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seen by
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viewers and be shared in an extended way,
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attractive features are willing to be explored.
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us in any post and we
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to use time chatting with them on social
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On the other hand
, there are
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some drawbacks of social
media
. The first one is that it has reduced
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contact.
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rather than visiting friends in
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person.
As a result
, they do not share the same kind of bond that they did earlier.
Secondly
, there is a lot of misinformation being spread on the internet. There is no way to authenticate what is true and what is false.
For instance
, a piece of false
news
was spread on WhatsApp that
people
from a particular part of India were being killed in Bangalore.
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the city,
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many disadvantages features in using social
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in my own perspective view can be outweighed by the advantages
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promotion of technologies
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social
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news
events
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getting easier and convenient.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • facilitate
  • geographically separated
  • fostering
  • connectivity
  • instant communication
  • real-time information
  • misinformation
  • rigorous checks and balances
  • fake news
  • addictive nature
  • detract
  • face-to-face interactions
  • mental health
  • awareness of limitations
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