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The diagram shows how Liverton docks change since 1980

The diagram shows how Liverton docks change since 1980
#liverton #docks #change
The given graphics
delineates
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 the lay of Liverton dock before and after experiencing the process of modernization in 1980 and
moment
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.
Overall
, it is discernible that the appearance of the bridge and flood barrier is
main
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the main
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 stunning point with the replacement of diverse ships for the only
one
 ship museum. Notably, the originally functional port modernizes into the residential trend. A detailed observation
at
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of
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 both maps
reveal
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 that the middle crane in the north of the 1980 picture was replaced to make
a
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space for
sailing
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 club, and the other in the northeast
also
 was removed, the
one
 in the southwest was
similarly
 changed to a new hotel. Meanwhile, in the
central
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 of the current picture, there is a replacement of five ships for a sole ship museum with the construction of a bridge
as well as
flood
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 barrier in the
right hand
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site
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side
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.
Moreover
, in 1980, there were two
separated
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 warehouses
in
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at
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 the top and
the
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one
in
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 the bottom. The former developed into a novel education Centre
while
 the latter became a kid’s playground.
Specially
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, the
one
 in the south experienced a development into apartments with an adjacent parking site.
Finally
, along the south riverbank, people have a new pedestrian path at now.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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