The table below shows the numbers of people in each age group working in certain sectors in the UK in 1998 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of people in each age group working in certain sectors in the UK in 1998 and 2006.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table compares the numbers of employees in each age group in four job sectors including hotel and catering, building,
technology
and education in the United Kingdom in 1998 and 2006.
Overall
, the vast majority of people in the UK worked in the technological industry in 2006, whilst the most popular field in 1998 was education.
According to
the information shown in the table
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there were many people
worked
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in the field of
technology
especially
the
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age group from 26-35 which was 454,315 people in 2006.
By contrast
, English employees who were in the mentioned age group in 1998 were mainly in educational careers which
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its
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figure was 112,559. What should be particularly mentioned is that individuals from 18 years old to 25 years old worked in building in 1998 and those in 2006 worked in
technology
mostly.
To sum up
,it can be apparently seen that the education industry was the main trend in 1998. But the tendency changed to
technology
in 2006.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • workforce distribution
  • significant
  • sector
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • composition
  • employment patterns
  • shift
  • notable
  • preference
  • age group
  • contrast
  • analyze
  • composition
  • reaffirm
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