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The chart below gives information about the percentage of people having COVID- 19 symptoms. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the percentage of people having COVID- 19 symptoms. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #percentage #people #covid- #symptoms #summarise #features #comparisons
From the
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The
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 chart,
it
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apply
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shows the number of
people
 in percentage that are affected by Covid -19 symptoms, represented by the Y-axis labelled from 0 - 90%.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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 the X-axis shows the various
symptons
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symptoms
 from difficulty in breathing to
non symptoms
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non-symptoms
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.
According to
 the chart, there are two serious
symptons
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symptoms
 that
records
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record
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a very high percentages
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a very high percentage
very high percentages
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: those who have fever and headaches recorded a percentage of approximately 75 and 80% respectively.
This
 shows that
this
 was the most common
symptons
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symptom
 among several patients. The second group of
people
 had
cough
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a cough
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 and muscle aches,
this
 is shown by a percentage of about 67% for cough and roughly 70% for
muschle
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muscle
 aches. The
last
 group of
people
 had problems with difficulty in breathing which was r
recordely
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recorded
 at about 35%
while
 the least group of
people
 without
symptons
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symptoms
 of
Covid-19
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COVID-19
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 was recorded was just about 10%. In my summary, it is seen that most
people
 showed
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symptoms
symptons
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symptoms
 of
this
 pandemic with about 80%
shown
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showing
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 signs of fever am
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, symptons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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