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Some people say its lot to tell about a person’s culture and character from their clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #person’s #culture #character #clothes
there are different
culture
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cultures
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 in the world that
it
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apply
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describe
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describes
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about
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apply
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people
.every
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Every
culture
have
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has
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specially
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a specially
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 custom with different clouts . when we
are know
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know
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 about different
culture
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cultures
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 I can say
this
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this person
these people
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people
 belong to
this
 area so I think a
person
demonstrate
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demonstrates
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culture
 and character
from
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through
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 their
clothes
 .maybe I can say my
thought
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thoughts
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 most of the time it is correct . the essence of each
person
 is made of
culture
 and personality that the
person
 shows by the style and type of
clothes
 she/he is wearing
.even
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Even
 from the way each
person
 dresses, we can find out about that
persons
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person's
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 mood that day ,her/
him
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his
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 way of thinking , the type of
people
 she/ he hangs out with. your
clothes
 can represent your job
for example
 a pilot wears a pilot suit , a chef wears an apron and
general
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a general
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 wears an army uniform …. There are different
idea
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ideas
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 about
this
 subject , some
people
 think we can not
jugged
Verb problem
judge
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the
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a
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person
 by his/her
clothes
 and we
are have
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have
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 to know a
person
 after pass a time after that we can comment on that
person
. In
fact
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fact,
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 knowing
people
 must be
causes
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caused
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from
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by
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 our judgment
not
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, not
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 their
clothes
 .
this
 sentence is correct but if we want
gagged
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to gag
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 a
person
 for her/him clothing brand
otherwise
 I don’t
thinking
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think
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another
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other
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people
.so
i
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I
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 can say we are not
a
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apply
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gagged a
person
 for any reason But I think
type
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the type
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 and model of clothing can
expressive
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express
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culture
Correct article usage
the culture
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 and character of each
person
 because every
culture
 has its own
clothes
 and each character wears
clothes
according to
 their personality.
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