The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
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The Diagram illustrates,How often the
citizens
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of
USA
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the USA
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go to Restaurants
for eaten
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to eat
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fast
food
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from the year 2003 to 2013.
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graph
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the graph
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show
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us that,the
mostly
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majority of
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public
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the public
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of
this
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country
eaten
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eat
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fast
food
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Once a
Week
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along with
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the
citizens
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who prefer Once or twice a month.
Firstly
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,The
citizens
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who prefer meals as
a
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apply
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fast
food
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Everyday
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is the least population with
ratio
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a ratio
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of just below 5 per
cent
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regardless of the years.
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with
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with this
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,
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the Individuals
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who did not eat junk
food
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ratio is
also
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below 5 per
cent
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.
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, there is a number of public who want to
counsume
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consume
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apply
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food
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few often in a
week
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and in 2006 these types of
citizens
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reached their high
with
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of
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20%.
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,
public
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the public
a public
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who eats junk
food
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just
few
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a few
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times in a calendar year is just below 15
percent
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per cent
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.
On the other hand
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,
Indviduals
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Individuals
who get fast
food
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once a
week
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and who
wants
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want
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it once
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once
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one
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or two times a month are almost
same
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the same
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. In 2013,
public
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the public
a public
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who
eaten
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eat
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food
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once or twice a month touched their high with
the
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a
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ratio of almost 36 per
cent
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and in 2006 who
wants
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wanted
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junk
food
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once a
week
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touched their peak with the number of almost 35 per
cent
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "along with".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words citizens, food, week, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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