It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

Taking some serious sort of risk in their Office life
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life is important. I believe
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Benefits can outweigh the disadvantages. On one hand, Taking some major
risk
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can cause several serious problems in your life. You can lose your job and will bankrupt
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, if you are
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employee in a multinational company and some other competitor
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you more
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opportunities
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to rise
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salary
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you just accept it just cause of
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risk
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and after that company
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fired
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you on your first day.
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task achievement
Develop your ideas more fully with examples and analysis in each paragraph. This will help support your main points and make your argument more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction that outlines your position, and a conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your opinion. This will help structure your essay more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical flow of your essay by connecting your ideas more clearly. Use linking words and phrases to help guide the reader through your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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