The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the number of individual expenditures in Europe native
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spent on different products and services in the
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of 50 years from 1958 to 2008.
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, at the beginning of the
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Luxury goods contributed the least to the expenditure pattern of people’s demand and Clothing was the most significant consumer demand. In comparison,
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Housing became the largest number of resident’s spending on commodities and the lowest contribution was made by Travel/transport. During the
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in question, Luxury goods and Food accounted for 7% and 8% respectively of people’s demand in 1958, experienced a more than doubled and shared a similar percentage of 17%.
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, Travel/transport and entertainment were 13% and 18% respectively in the year of 1958 and witnessed a slight decrease of 6% and 16% in 2008. At the beginning of the
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, the highest percentage of people’s expenditure
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Clothing made up 32% before declining considerably to only 12% in 2008.
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housing made up 45% of Europe spending
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and reached the highest point of 32%, which comprised almost a third of total commodities in 2008.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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