Write a story beginning with the :The days were beginning to be chilly, too chilly to be without fire.

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Countries have different
kind
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of weather. In some countries, we can experience severe call
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in others it can be too hot. In some countries like Canada, there is extreme cold and it is absolutely necessary to light a fire in order to feel hot and avoid our body trembling
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the severe cold.
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, in
Mauritius
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this
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is not the case as we do not have severe winter. We can struggle with the winter simply using warm clothes, jackets and mat covers. Usually, when people go
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to
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camping outdoors, they will light a fire to protect
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them
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from cold and
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from insects. Many insects and animals like rats and snakes will not approach a place where a fire has been
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.
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will ensure we are protected from these animals. Unlike in ancient times, Mauritius used to have quite cold weather but during the
last
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few years, we
notice
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that it is not that cold during
winter
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season and I believe
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is
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the
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climate change which is having an impact on our weather.
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, it is not required to be fully equipped against the mild cold season in Mauritius.
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, there are
circumstance
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when it is required to take
precaution
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precautions
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against
cold
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colds
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because it can cause severe
illness
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illnesses
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like bronchitis, respiratory problems and others.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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