The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the changes in the birth aspects of
China
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and the
USA
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between 1920 and 2000.
Overall
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, in
this
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graph
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graph,
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we can that
China
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extremely decreased than the
USA
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.
China
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got their top mark and extremely decreased,
while
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the
USA
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rapidly decreased.
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, if we take a look
for
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at
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China
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they started with
10
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a 10
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score
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in 1920 and in 1950 got their top mark after started extremely decreased for
the
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all periods
from
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between
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1950 and 2000 with 2,5 scores.
Secondly
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, the
USA
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had better scores than
China
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. It is
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at the start
in
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of
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1920. After that
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it decresed
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decresed
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decreased
to 1945 and extremely
incresed
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increased
to 1950 with the highest 15 scores.
In addition
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, the
USA
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started
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words china, usa with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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