Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their work place (e.g.: at home, when travelling, etc.). Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relative examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In the
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development
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many benefits
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because
it makes us
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outside the office.
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, opinions are divided over whether the merits of information technology
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supersede the
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demerits. Personally, I believe that working outside their workplace
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work efficiency. There are clearly a few demerits of working anywhere they want. For business
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the most notable one is that they can not make a close rapport with their co-workers. Because
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they do not communicate frequently about their daily lives and they can not spend time often after
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the office.
Due to
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them.
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unstable
In spite of the above-mentioned views, some people assert that business efficiency
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. Because
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