The diagram below shows how avocado oil is extracted. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. EXTRACTION OF AVOCADO OIL

The diagram below shows how avocado oil is extracted.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

EXTRACTION OF AVOCADO OIL
Contained in the diagram is information pertaining to
different
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the different
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stages of making avocado
oil
.
Overall
, there are 9 stages, beginning with softening the
fruit
before washing
as well as
being crushed and blended where it is split to collect the
oil
, being filled, bottling and ready for contribution. The initial stage focuses on the
fruit
being collected and soft in order to remove the rotten ones and keep the good quality
fruit
. After that, it is washed
then
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and then
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goes through the crusher and blender so as to remove seeds and skins, ready to pass 2 stages of splitting. Splitting to receive the
oil
is the purpose of the later stage. As the mixture
go
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went
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to the centrifuge stage in the range of 45 and 50C, it was split to separate the solids and liquids
then
separate the
oil
and water. Simultaneously, the solid waste
along with
seeds, skins and rotten
fruit
will be transported to the orchard
so
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which
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helps the plant grow faster
while
the wastewater
will be
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is
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removed.
Finally
, the
oil
comes across the filter and is clarified before being bottled and ready for distribution.
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