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The line graph shows the percentage of spending in a European country from 1960 to 2000.

The line graph shows the percentage of spending in a European country from 1960 to 2000.
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The line graph apparently depicts the percentage of expenses
of
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in a European nation from 1960 to 2000. The major expenditure of the country is food, leisure, clothing, transport, and
fuel
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. To embark, food led topmost over the years. All the essential expenses shrunk in the course of time.
Fuel
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 and energy held
a
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 least position from 1960 to 2000.
Overall
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, the amount
spend
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 on food was more than 30% in 1960 which gradually declined to nearly 15%.
Besides
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, the charge paid for leisure was
also
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 lessened
form
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from
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 20% to 10% from 1960 to 2000.
However
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, there was a surge in
the
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spending on clothing over time which was lower than 10% in 1960 and elevated to 15% in the year 2000.
Furthermore
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, the expenditure on transport and
fuel
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 was not so much in
contrary
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 to other essentials. The cash on transport was 10% in 1960 but it diminished for
the
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 number of years and it held merely 5% in 2000.
Moreover
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,
fuel
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 and energy
was
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were
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also
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 more than 5% in the year 1960 and dropped rapidly
around
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 3% in 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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