The line graph shows the percentage of spending in a European country from 1960 to 2000.
The line graph apparently depicts the percentage of expenses
of
in a European nation from 1960 to 2000. The major expenditure of the country is food, leisure, clothing, transport, and Change preposition
apply
fuel
.
To embark, food led topmost over the years. All the essential expenses shrunk in the course of time. Fuel
and energy held a
least position from 1960 to 2000.
Change the article
the
Overall
, the amount spend
on food was more than 30% in 1960 which gradually declined to nearly 15%. Change the form of the verb
spent
Besides
, the charge paid for leisure was also
lessened form
20% to 10% from 1960 to 2000. Correct your spelling
from
However
, there was a surge in the
spending on clothing over time which was lower than 10% in 1960 and elevated to 15% in the year 2000.
Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
, the expenditure on transport and fuel
was not so much in contrary
to other essentials. The cash on transport was 10% in 1960 but it diminished for Correct your spelling
contrast
the
number of years and it held merely 5% in 2000.
Correct article usage
a
Moreover
, fuel
and energy was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
also
more than 5% in the year 1960 and dropped rapidly around
3% in 2000.Change preposition
to around
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