Many people around the world use social media everyday to keep in touch with other people and get news events. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?
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news
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facilitate
global interactions outweigh the Wrong verb form
facilitating
drawbavks
of potential social isolation.
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drawbacks
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people
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easier
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more easily
media
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up to date
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can
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that can
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people
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regardless
distance
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of distance
such
as Facebook, Linking Words
Instagram
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and Instagram
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, those who Linking Words
lives
far away from home can now connect with their families, Change the verb form
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friends
on a daily basis without any fees.
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and friends
news
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consist
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information
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of information
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collected
aoround
the world. Correct your spelling
around
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a variety
news
events about different changes in many places that will be uploaded on the Internet Use synonyms
everyday
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every day
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, residents can get to know their country's situation and Linking Words
also
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development
can lead to social isolation because Fix the agreement mistake
developments
people
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are immersed
that
they cannot Correct word choice
so that
unteract
with others in reality. Correct your spelling
interact
For instance
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media
among the young is over 7 hours per day which Use synonyms
mean
they spend most of their time on the Internet Correct subject-verb agreement
means
instead
of communicating with friends or families but parents can limit their children's time of abusing social Linking Words
media
.
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is
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are
outwiehed
by the increased of accessing various Correct your spelling
outweighed
news
and global interactions. Use synonyms
Hence
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media
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people
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