Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?

There is an increasing trend
that
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foreign
films
outperform
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domestic
films
to draw in
large
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volume of audience. Globalization and international collaboration can contribute to
this
phenomenon, and I agree that governments should give more financial support to local film industries. The reason can be stated from an economic perspective.
Along with
globalization, domestic
movie
makers prefer to collaborate with foreign
companies
to import foreign
films
at
lower
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cost than producing
films
domestically.
For example
, some Chinese
movie
makers seek
long term
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strategical
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collaboration and import
films
from Disney and Paramount
companies
.
Such
advanced
movie
makers with high
reputation
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globally would guarantee
movie
quality and save domestic
movie
manufacturing costs at meanwhile.
Therefore
, audiences who are bombarded with the advertisement of these international movies will be intrigued to watch these movies. In turn, out of curiosity to a strange
culture
,
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the publics
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publics
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public
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would prefer to spend less money and time getting to know other
culture
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cultures
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and appreciating unknown arts rather than travelling to that country. I hold the view that
government
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should be responsible for supporting domestic
films
financially.
Firstly
, private
companies
in the entertainment industry are mostly profit-driven.
This
trend will increasingly exacerbate
the
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culture
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erosion by importing more foreign
films
at lower
cost
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costs
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but
higher
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with higher
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quality. Still, local domestic
films
need
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spend considerable money in research and development to polish the
movie making
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technology to get competitive power in the global setting.
Therefore
,
such
potential sunk cost is only affordable by the government, a
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entity
that is
more responsible for protecting domestic
culture
compared to other entities. In conclusion, globalization and profit-driven
in
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the
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international collaboration
is
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the root
cause
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causes
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to make
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of making
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foreign
films
more attractive to either private
companies
or
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the publics
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publics
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public
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. To protect domestic
culture
and promote domestic film, more financial support from the government is necessary and crucial.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Cultural exchange
  • Cinematic expertise
  • Diverse narratives
  • Enriching cultural experience
  • Linguistic proficiency
  • Cinematography advancements
  • Government subsidies
  • Promote local talent
  • Economic sustainability
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