Your friend's dog has recently passed away. Write a letter to console your friend. In your letter Express your sympathy Include memories you have about the dog Invite your friend to do something with you
Dear, Diana
I
hopr
you're doing Correct your spelling
hope
alright
. I'm writing Replace the word
all right
this
email to you,
because I heard about your dog. Recently passed Remove the comma
apply
aways
. She was not a pet, but more like a family member to us. I can't imagine how Correct your spelling
away
do
you Verb problem
apply
feeling
about being left by your beloved dog. I Wrong verb form
feel
got
the same feeling as you and your family.
I Verb problem
have
also
have lots of memories with her since we were very young. During that time we used to play with her after we got back from school. Moreover
I love feeding the food to her mouth and many more. I still remember the way she Add a comma
Moreover,
welcoming
me to the house Wrong verb form
welcomed
also
I have many picture
which you took for me. It looks really cute.
I hope you and your families will get better as soon as possible, I would like you to come to my house if you change your mind. We can have dinner together Change to a plural noun
pictures
this
friday
night.
Always loves
FonChange the capitalization
Friday
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Coherence and Cohesion
Your letter has some minor errors that detract from its coherence. Consider proofreading to correct typos (e.g., 'hopr' should be 'hope,' 'aways' should be 'away'), grammatical errors, and improve clarity. Aim to use complete sentences and check for verb tense consistency.
Coherence and Cohesion
You've addressed the task requirements, but the flow of ideas can be further improved for better coherence. Aim to connect your ideas more smoothly, perhaps by using more transition words or phrases like 'In addition,' 'Furthermore,' or 'As a result,' which will help the narrative flow more naturally.
Task Achievement
Try to fully explore each bullet point in the task. While you mentioned your sympathy and memories with the dog, expanding on how these experiences impacted you or sharing more specific memories could enhance your response. Similarly, specifying what activity you want to do with your friend and why it might be comforting can make your invitation more compelling.
Task Achievement
The letter's tone is mostly appropriate, expressing sympathy and care; however, ensuring that the letter is free from typos and mistakes will make your tone seem more respectful and professional. Consider using phrases like 'I was heartbroken to hear' and 'I cherish the memories' to add depth to your emotional expressions.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,
