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The pie charts show information about energy production in a country in two separate years

The pie charts show information about energy production in a country in two separate years
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The pie charts show information about the manufacture of various
energy
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 in the nation during a 10-year period, starting from 1995.
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, it is discernible that coal and gas were two crucial energies,
whereas
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 nuclear and 'other' were trivial elements in
energy
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production
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 between 1995 and 2005. A detailed glance at the pie charts reveals that coal, gas, and petrol had roughly equal percentages in terms of
energy
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production
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, slightly above 29%,
while
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 in the following 10 years witnessed a gradual surge in gas and coal manufacture, nearly 31%. Concerning the data, the proportion of petro
production
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 declined steadily, representing just 19,55%. By 2005, approximately 5% of
production
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 was added in 'other' and nuclear
energy
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, accounting for 9% and 10% respectively
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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