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Band 4

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working from home

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 world has changed dramatically since the invention of
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the internet
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, which brought a lot to our
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 life.
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, you do not need to spend hours to get to your office, you just need to get out of
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bed, put on your shirt and turn on your device. Of
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 changes can not enter
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lifes
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 without some people arguing
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whether
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 is acceptable or not. So, we are going to discuss
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the pros
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 and cons of working from home. The first disadvantage
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 is that when you are working from your house, you bearly communicate with your colleagues.
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 bad for our mental health as humans are social creatures and if we feel that we are outside of our social group,
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 symptoms may
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occur
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, there were
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statistics which showed that during
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 pandemic general stress
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 increased significantly and
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 caused increased demand for psychological therapy. Another
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minus
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 is that there are many more distractive factors,
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 as pets, family members,
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, in your house than in the office.
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 level of
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 efficiency is much lower which will cause
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on
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 your job.
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, the ability to manage your timetable by yourself may be a huge advantage for those who value freedom.
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, individuals that can not
work
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 with strict deadlines may be considered as
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inefficient
 in the office, but if they are given a bit more time, they will show even better
work
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 than others.
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, people who
work
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 from home have more time for their
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families
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. Especially, it is crucial for those who have young children
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 require a lot of attention from parents.
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, spending more time with your nearest and dearest can increase your mental health.
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, everybody will see different pluses and minuses of working from home, but the main thing is to find
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work-life
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a work-life
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 balance which suits your
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lifestyle
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.
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coherence cohesion
Focus on clearly outlining your main argument in the introduction and summarizing it in the conclusion to improve structure.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical flow by better linking paragraphs and ideas, and use cohesive devices such as pronouns and conjunctions more effectively.
task achievement
Ensure a complete response to the task by discussing both advantages and disadvantages more equally and ensuring all parts of the question are addressed.
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Develop arguments with more specific examples and clearer comprehensive ideas by providing more detailed explanations and evidence.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Remote work
  • Telecommuting
  • Home office
  • Flexible schedule
  • Productivity
  • Cost-effective
  • Isolation
  • Burnout
  • Work-life balance
  • Technical disruptions
  • Commuting
  • Distractions
  • Connectivity
  • Collaboration
  • Autonomy
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