The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar graph illustrates the number of jobless in the UK
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and its rates in Europe and Japan between 1993 and 2007. In general, both
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of EU and
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had a dramatic downward trend;
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, the rest of Japan rose significantly.
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, the EU had the highest percentage among the three countries during these years. From 1993 to 1997, the EU had a rapid growth (from about 9
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to nearly 12
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). After that, the level of it was a considerable decline from approximately 12
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(in 1997) to about 8
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(in 2003) .
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and went down to under 8 per cent in 2007. The next one was the UK which had a downward trend until 2001. In 1993, there were 11
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was a minimal upward to 6
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