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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee amd bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five different European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee amd bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five different European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tables illustrate data about
sales
 of
Fairtrade labelled
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Fairtrade-labelled
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coffee
 and
bananas
 over the 5-year period in five European countries.
Overall
, Switzerland and The United Kingdom were both high-ranked in
two
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the two
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 tables. And the
sales
 of
bananas
 in 2004 Switzerland
was
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were
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 the highest
sale
from
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among
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 others.
First,
the earnings from
sale
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the sale
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 of
Coffee
was
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were
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 ten times as popular as the
sale
 of
bananas
 in 1999. In the
last
 year of the question the
sale
 of
bananas
 rapidly increased from the first year of the question. In Sweden and
Belgium
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Belgium,
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 there were the lowest
sales
 of both
coffee
 and
banana
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bananas
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 in the period in question.
Sum
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The sum
A sum
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 of
sales
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of banana
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banana
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bananas
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 in
two
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the two
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 periods was
remarkable
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remarkably
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 higher than
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the sale
a sale
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sale
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sales
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 of
coffee
.
Sweden
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In Sweden
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 and Denmark the
sales
 of
banana
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bananas
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 decreased over the half of decade period. There are three
sales
 which are a little bit of a million
of
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apply
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euros. And there were two
sales
 which
are
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were
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 significantly big, over 20
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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euros.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, bananas, sale with synonyms.
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