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It is becoming increasingly popular for school leavers to take a year off (a gap year) before going to university. Do the advantages of this outweigh any disadvantages?

#school #leavers #year #gap #university #outweigh
In the modern era, many students prefer taking
1 year
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 gap before they enrolling university because they can enjoy their lives and experience diverse things
such
 as
travels
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, work experiences, and studies. In my opinion, the advantages of
this
 trend outweigh the demerits, and I will explain my reasons below. There are clearly a few demerits of having a break time on their study. The most notable one is that it will be
waste
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their
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of their
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 time. Because, if their plan is not
clearly
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, they spend
this
 period useless.
Secondly
, their study flow was cut the flow.
Also
, starting study can be more
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 and
need
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 a good deal of time to get a high grade.
Due to
this
 reason, they have to review their subjects before
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 to university.
Last
 but not least, their graduation will
delay
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as a result
, they can not earn money earlier.
On the other hand
, some people assert that their view of the world
is expand
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.
Additionally
, a closer examination would reveal that we can look back
our
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 lives.
Due to
this
 fact, we can construct
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our future initiative and reflect on myself.
Furthermore
, they can concentrate
their
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on their
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extra
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extracurricular
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 curriculums
such
 as studying a second language, finding their hobbies, and reading more books. Considering the above views,
it is clear that
, though there are some negative aspects
leaving
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 their school, the merits will continue to outweigh the demerits.
Thus
, if they make their plan and set a goal specifically, it
lead
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 to good memory.
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