The line chart below gives information about the percentage of female members of parliament in European countries (2000 – 2012)

The line chart below gives information about the percentage of female members of parliament in European countries (2000 – 2012)
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information about the proportion of female members of parliament in some particular countries between 2000 and 2012. Looking from an
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perspective,
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there was a general upward trend in the percentage of women elected. in 2000, Germany witnessed the highest rate of female representatives of parliament in Europe at around one-
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followed by 17% in the UK, 23% in
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% in
Spain
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, the figure for Italy was only about 3%. Over the years, there was significant growth in the proportion of women in Italy, jumping to roughly 23% in 2008. In 2012, The figures for the UK
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and
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same level with about 22%. As for Germany,
Spain
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and
Belgium
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, they had a similar trend. The percentage of female participants
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parliament in
Belgium
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and
Spain
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increased rapidly and
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stood at 35% until 2008. The figure for Germany changed gradually by nearly 1%.
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of the period,
Belgium
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reached a peak of about 37% and
Spain
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decreased to 35%.
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