Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Nowadays, a lot of educational institutes tend to shift lessons from offline to online
format
. There is an opinion that studying at home has less positive aspects than a traditional format
. I partially agree with this
statement, hence
there are a lot of benefits about
remote studying, Change preposition
to
however
some of the lessons should stay in Add a comma
however,
a classrooms
.
The main reason to Correct the article-noun agreement
a classroom
classrooms
chose
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choose
online
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the online
format
of studying is affordability, hence
anyone all around the world has access to the top universitie's
lectures. Change noun form
universities'
For instance
, such
universities like Harvard, MIT, Correct quantifier usage
apply
Oxford
have fully online courses and even some of them Correct word choice
and Oxford
providing
a whole degree. Wrong verb form
provide
Therefore
, remote education
helps to equalize right
to Correct article usage
the right
education
among people,
and make it Remove the comma
apply
accessable
Correct your spelling
accessible
for
everyone. Change preposition
to
Furthermore
, online education
is usually cheaper, so more students can get it without going on
Change preposition
into
a
debt.
Correct article usage
apply
On the other hand
, there is an opinion that online education
usually
weaker, Add a missing verb
is usually
due to
the lack of control from the teacher. For instance
, there are a lot of stories from students that they are more likely to lose concentration and be distracted during online sessions. This
fact shows that,
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apply
new
Correct article usage
a new
format
of teaching may lead to a lower educational level among gradutes
.
In conclusion, both online and offline formats have their benefits. Almost everyone has access to remote Correct your spelling
graduates
education
. However
students Add a comma
However,
are tend
to get weaker Change the verb form
tend
knowledges
after attending online lectures. I partially agree with the fact that Change the wording
knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
education
in classrooms is better,
because both Remove the comma
apply
of
formats Change preposition
apply
has
positive and negative sides.Correct subject-verb agreement
have
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Include both an introduction and a conclusion that clearly state your position on the topic. The introduction should outline what you plan to discuss, and the conclusion should summarize your main points and restate your opinion.
coherence cohesion
To better support your main points, include more detailed examples and explanations. Rather than stating general benefits or drawbacks, illustrate these with specific examples or data to strengthen your argument.
task achievement
To fully respond to the task, make sure to address all parts of the prompt thoroughly. Present a clear opinion on the topic and back it up with reasoned arguments and examples. Include a balanced discussion if the question asks for it.
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Clarify and expand your ideas to ensure a comprehensive response. Each paragraph should contribute a unique point that supports your overall argument, providing depth and insight into the issue.
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Incorporate more relevant, specific examples from your own knowledge or experience. This can help to demonstrate your understanding of the topic and provide concrete support for your position.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.