The table below shows how the Uk unemployed spent their time last year. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the Uk unemployed spent their time last year. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table diagram illustrates
the
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how the United
Kingdom
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unemployed time was spent previous year.
Additionally
, the information
categorized
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into 4 groups which were morning
men
, morning
women
,
afternoon
men
,
afternoon
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and afternoon
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women
.
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, it is noticeable that most morning
women
do
house work
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which is
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the highest
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highest
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in
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the table
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by
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49% and following that, morning
women
spent
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their time
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doing
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shopping at the second highest
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in
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the table with 26%. For
men
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men,
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most
men
spent their time looking for a job (22%) in the morning and watching TV (14%) in the
afternoon
. The 3 most popular activities for both sexes, in the morning, are job hunting, shopping, and housework. There are some changes in the
afternoon
. On one hand,
men
preferred watching TV, gardening, and looking for employment.
On the other hand
,
women
preferred visiting friends or relatives, searching for a job, and doing housework Some activities like playing sports and staying in bed were reported only by
men
in both periods.
Women
reported these activities just in the morning.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, afternoon with synonyms.
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