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The table below shows how the Uk unemployed spent their time last year. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the Uk unemployed spent their time last year. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table diagram illustrates
the
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how the United
Kingdom
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 unemployed time was spent previous year.
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, the information
categorized
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 into 4 groups which were morning
men
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, morning
women
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,
afternoon
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men
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,
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afternoon
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and afternoon
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women
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.
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, it is noticeable that most morning
women
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 do
house work
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housework
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 which is
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the highest
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highest
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the highest
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on
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in
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 the table
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by
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 49% and following that, morning
women
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spent
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 their time
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doing
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shopping at the second highest
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in
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 the table with 26%. For
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men
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 most
men
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 spent their time looking for a job (22%) in the morning and watching TV (14%) in the
afternoon
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. The 3 most popular activities for both sexes, in the morning, are job hunting, shopping, and housework. There are some changes in the
afternoon
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. On one hand,
men
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 preferred watching TV, gardening, and looking for employment.
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,
women
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 preferred visiting friends or relatives, searching for a job, and doing housework Some activities like playing sports and staying in bed were reported only by
men
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 in both periods.
Women
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 reported these activities just in the morning.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, afternoon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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