The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The line chart illustrates information about the amount of
visitors
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entering a museum in the United Kingdom in two seasons in 2005. It is noticeable that the highest
visitors
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of British Museum was at 12 o'
clock
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in the summer
season
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.
By contrast
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,
visitors
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would not come to the museum after 15 o'
clock
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in winter. In the summer
season
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, the
number
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of
visitors
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significantly skyrocketed between 0 o'
clock
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to 11 o'
clock
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reaching 1300
visitors
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.
Then
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, the
number
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of
visitors
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slowly rose to 1500
visitors
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which increased the growth of 200 persons.
However
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, the
number
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of
visitors
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dropped time by time which fell from 1300
visitors
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to 800
visitors
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from 11 o'
clock
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to 16 o'
clock
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.
Moreover
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, the
number
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of
visitors
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entering sharply decreased from 800 to 0
visitors
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, respectively during 2 hours. In the winter
season
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, the amount of
visitors
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was lower than summer
season
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which was highest at 12 o'
clock
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.
In addition
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, the
number
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of
visitors
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entering during periods 0 to 10 which significantly increased was 400
visitors
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.
As well as
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1 hour after that the
number
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of
visitors
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was steady for one hour. After that, the
number
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of
visitors
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achieved 600
visitors
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in one hour from 11 to 12.
Nevertheless
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, the
number
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of
visitors
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significantly declined to 600
visitors
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. After that, the visitor was steady until 18 o'
clock
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, clock, season, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Average number of visitors
  • Museum
  • Summer
  • Winter
  • Trends
  • Peaks
  • Lows
  • Month-by-month analysis
  • Increases
  • Decreases
  • Stability
  • Attendance
  • Comparisons
  • Disparity
  • Similarity
  • Concluding figures
  • Key findings
  • Notable
  • Surprising
  • Expected outcomes
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