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Working from home, some think as beneficial some people think it may distract the family routine. Discuss both views and what is your opinion?

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In contemporary times, remote working has become a debated issue. Some
people
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 claim that working from
home
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 has many benefits
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 others believe that
people
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 will procrastinate by family activities.
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 at the arguments for it before turning to those against it. In spite of the against, I firmly believe that working online can foster
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-life
balancing
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. Individuals who
work
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 from
home
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 think that
its
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it
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offer
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offers
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 some advantages like they can supervise their
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toddlers
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working hours. Another reason
think
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is
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 that they can spend more
times
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time
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 with their family or can
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 from anywhere
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 as working from abroad.
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this
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 can cultivate
work
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-life
balancing
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 in society.
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, either companies or employees have a positive benefit to saving money for cutting their budgets.
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 it might
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 drawbacks, it plays a vital role for
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the envinronment
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envinronment
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environment
to reduce
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in reducing
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vechicles
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vehicles
 on the road and
traffics
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traffic
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, so it can
decline
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reduce
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the
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air pollution.
Conversely
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, others say that
people
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 will not
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 if they
work
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 from
home
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 because they will procrastinate with their personal activities
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 as nurturing their children.
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, they will not focus
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on finishing
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 their tasks or projects quickly.
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, at their houses, there is
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work
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 atmosphere in order to
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makes
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people
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 lazy to
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as well
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as
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and
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 they will have a lack of communication or social life among
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employees.
To sum up
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, working from
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 has benefits
outweigh
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 the drawbacks. In my point of view, fostering a
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-life
balancing
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 in communities through
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 issue can maintain
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people
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people's
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 mental health.

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