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The diagrams below show how houses can be protected in areas which are prone to flooding. Summarise it.

The diagrams below show how houses can be protected in areas which are prone to flooding. Summarise it.
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The information about the protection of buildings in the locality which is prone to floods is depicted by the given
picture
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 chart. The information is calibrated in the form of pictorial representation.
Overall
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, the most striking feature of the chart is that in one
picture
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, there is
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stopbank
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a stopbank
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 to manage the excess water,
while
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 in the other
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picture
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picture,
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 there is no
stopbank
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 to prevent flooding. Taking a cursory glance, it can be clearly manifested that on the left side, the first
picture
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 has
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stopbank
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a stopbank
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 for
the
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apply
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flood prevention on which freeboard is indicated, next to it is a river which is at
100-year
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a 100-year
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 flood level. In the middle, there is
building
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a building
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 and internal ponding which connects with a floodgate.
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, from the right side, internal runoff from the clouds is pouring into the river. Moving to
the
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apply
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further
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 details, in the second
picture
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, there is no
stopbank
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,
therefore
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; the level of house building is increased with the help of poles.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, the dimension of
freeboard
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the freeboard
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 is increased to 300 mm above the 100-year ponding level.
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,
water
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the water
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of
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from
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 the pond
is passing
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passes
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 under the house which later directly goes to the mainstream of
river
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the river
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words picture, stopbank with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prone to flooding, elevate, structure, waterproof materials, stilts, platforms, modify, water flow, barriers, levees, floodwalls, sandbags, landscaping adjustments, rain garden, water-resistant materials, renovation, stainless steel, concrete fixtures, elevated electrical systems, short circuits, emergency kit, water pump, flood alarm system, detachable electrical system
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