Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?
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traffic
jams as well. Some people believe that the high cost of fuel can be a solution for reducing pollution and Use synonyms
traffic
growth. I feel that increasing fuel taxes cannot solve the gas Use synonyms
emissions
problem and transport Use synonyms
traffic
. I believe that there Use synonyms
is
alternative options that can help with Change the verb form
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and electric Use synonyms
vehicles
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, increasing the price of fuel can increase the price of all petroleum products and Linking Words
transportation
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This
session can affect many poverty families Linking Words
due to
the high cost of living. It may Linking Words
also
have an impact on many countries' economies, which rely heavily on petroleum as their primary source of income and energy. Linking Words
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, Gulf countries depend Linking Words
to
petrol production as an essential source for economic development.
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On the other hand
, many measures can be taken to reduce pollution and Linking Words
traffic
congestion. using public Use synonyms
transportation
like a bus or train rather than personal cars, Use synonyms
,
which reduces Change the punctuation
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traffic
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gases
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emissions
. To explain more, Use synonyms
this
will reduce the number of Linking Words
vehicles
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in
the road to facilitate the movement of Change preposition
on
vehicles
and drop gas Use synonyms
emissions
. Another strategy would be using electric trains and cars. Use synonyms
For example
, many developing countries are starting to use electric trains and cars as friendly to the environment.
In conclusion, the high cost of fossil fuels cannot be a solution for reducing greenhouse gas Linking Words
emissions
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traffic
jams, replacing personal Use synonyms
vehicles
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, or making the better choice to depend on electric public Use synonyms
vehicles
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