The pie charts give information about why people in Great Britain had to visit O museums in the years 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts give information about why people in Great Britain had to visit O museums in the years 2000 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The information collated clearly shows that the majority of people visited museums in the UK to gain knowledge and learn and
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did not fluctuate much between the two years as it was only a one
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difference. The
museums
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museum's
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special exhibits
however
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bigger variation in percentages as 2010 was seemingly more popular to visitors given the six
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rise in attendees,
whereas
filling travel schedules
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more important in the year 2000
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2010
due to
the drop in figures of fifteen
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, which is quite a large difference but obviously peoples travel plans changed significantly. Surprisingly, spending time with friends and family does not appear to be very high on
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priorities as the figures shown are in the lower teens so
this
time clearly isn't reported as important as learning. I was personally unaware
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you could purchase art from a museum so I am not surprised at the low figure here.
To conclude
, learning and gaining knowledge is seen as more important than spending time with friends and family, filling travel schedules or attending special exhibits, which is sad as museums are incredible places to visit, free and need the support to keep running but
this
pie chart shows how peoples outlooks have changed in ten years.
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