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The maps below show the changes in New York city from 1990 to 2005

The maps below show the changes in New York city from 1990 to 2005
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The information about the modifications made to
the
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New York
city
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City
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 over the period of 5 years is depicted in the given picture chart. The information is calibrated in the form of
pictorial
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a pictorial
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 presentation.
Overall
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, the most striking feature of the chart is that the urban city underwent several changes and a lot of developments were noticed. Taking a cursory glance, it can be manifested that in the northwest direction, a single house situated near the pond
was vanished
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vanished
has vanished
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 to build a society
consist
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consisting
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 of multiple flats.
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, houses were demolished in the southwest direction to provide citizens with a big supermarket and just beneath the supermarket, more houses were constructed. Moving to
the
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further
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 details, a new building of a factory was constructed at the cost of trees in the southeast direction
whereas
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 the railway line was
extented
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extended
 to cover the whole city.
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, the cab station was newly introduced for the passengers to hire a ferry.
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, in the top-middle, a new airport was constructed for the convenience of the locals.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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