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The chart below shows the percentage of young people in higher education in four different countries in 2000, 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of young people in higher education in four different countries in 2000, 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart presents the number of teenagers in higher education in four countries from 2000 to 2010. It is noticeable that the data clearly revealed an upward trend in the majority of nations, except
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 B.
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,
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 D had the greatest total of graduates who joined a university. In 2010, the percentage of students in
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 D went over 60% making it the top one;
nevertheless
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, it coincided with the remaining nations that reached just under 50%.
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, in the following five years, the rate of adults who enrolled for
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 A, C, and D increased gradually at approximately 5%,
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 Nation B actually ran into a moderate decrease by one-eighth.
At the end
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 of the period, surprisingly, there was a minimal incline in the student percentages in
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 B and D by two points;
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, the opposite stayed on the same level, accounting for 52%. In comparison,
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 A precisely jumped significantly by one-fifth.
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