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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people cost ei buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mainters, at make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people cost ei buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mainters, at make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the outcomes after getting
public
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the public
a public
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 point of view of consumption habits of tea and
coffee
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 and
also
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 purchasing in five cities in Australia.
Overall
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, Most people preferred buying fresh
coffee
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 and least went to
cafe
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cafes
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 for
coffee
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 or tea in five Australian countries. People
bought
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who bought
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the
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apply
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fresh
coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4 weeks
takes
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take
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 the first spot in
diagram
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the diagram
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 with
the
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a
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 proportion of about 64% in Melbourne and second place in Hobart (63%) and third position in Sydney (61%).
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,
who
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counsume
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consume
consumed
 instant
coffee
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were
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 relatively steady for every country and
hobart
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Hobart
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 takes the first spot with the number
of
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apply
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54% and least for Sydney
for
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with
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 46%. People
went
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who went
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 to
cafe
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cafes
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 is most least in
graph
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the graph
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 and highest for Sydney with
ratio
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a ratio
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 of 44%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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