The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the students of Anthropology graduates from the same university
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that displays salaries after five years of experience in Anthropology.
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did postgraduate study
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after finishing their course takes the first spot with
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reached second place with 15% and
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for students which
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On the other hand
, freelancers reached the highest position after five years of experience in
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Anthropology
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, time with synonyms.
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