The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tables illustrate the difference
about
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between
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how many
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degree
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degrees
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Celsius
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would be and when would the sun rise and set between
London
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and
Sydney
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in December 2018. The maximum
temperature
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during
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from
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December 28th to 30th in
London
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was 13
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degree
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degrees
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Celsius
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while
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that was 31
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degree
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degrees
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Celsius
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in
Sydney
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. The minimum
temperature
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in
Sydney
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(19
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degree
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degrees
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Celsius
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) was over 6 times than that in
London
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as
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at
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3
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degree
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degrees
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Celsius
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, which was even higher than
top
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temperature
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in
London
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, too. The average
temperature
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in
London
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was less than 10
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degree
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degrees
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Celsium
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Celsius
but
exceeding
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exceeded
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20
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degree
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degrees
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Celsius
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in
Sydney
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. Sunrise occurred about 3 hours later in
London
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(about 8 AM) than
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Sydney
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in Sydney
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(5:45AM)
in
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on
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these 3 days in December 2018. As for sunset was at around 4 PM in
London
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while
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4 hours later in
Sydney
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at around 8 PM.
As a result
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, the duration of daylight
of
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in
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Sydney
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was
15hour
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15 hours
per day, which was
near
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nearly
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2 times more in
London
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with 8
hour
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hours
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each day. In summary,
Sydney
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was warmer and had more hours of daylight than
London
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words degree, celsius, london, sydney, temperature with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • comparison
  • London
  • Sydney
  • December 2018
  • weekend
  • information
  • data
  • summarise
  • select
  • report
  • features
  • analysis
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