The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five european countries

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five european countries
The tables compare How much
fairtrade
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fair trade
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coffee
and bananas were sold in 1999 and 2004, in
five
nations of Europe. As for
coffee
, the first table shows low-level
coffee
sales
increasing in all
five
countries
. The UK was the most salient country with 1.5
million
in 1999 and
its
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it
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jump
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jumped
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to 20
million
.
Denmark
, accounting for 1.8
million
in 1999, doubled exactly in 2004. In
two
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the two
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places
sales
increased by the same small amount: 1.8-2
million
in
Denmark
and 0.8-1
million
in
Sweden
. Meanwhile, in Belgium, there was an increase, from 0.8-1
million
. In the second table,
although
the
sales
of bananas increased in Switzerland, UK, and Belgium, they went down in two other
countries
(
Sweden
and
Denmark
). Swiss
sales
figures jumped from 15-47
million
euros
during these
five
years,
while
in the UK and Belgium
sales
only grew from 1-5.5 and 0.6-4
million
respectively.
However
,
Sweden
and
Denmark
showed a different pattern, with falls in banana
sales
from 1.8-1 and 2-0.9
million
euros
. Comparing the two tables, the
coffee
sales
ranged from 0.8-3
million
euros
in these
five
countries
,
while
the range of banana
sales
figures was from 0.6 to 2
million
euros
. By 2004,
sales
figures for both products had mounted in most
countries
, except for
Sweden
and
Denmark
which recorded drops in banana
sales
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, five, sales, countries, million, denmark, sweden, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "jump" was used 2 times.

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