The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five european countries

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five european countries
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The tables compare How much
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coffee
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and bananas were sold in 1999 and 2004, in
five
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nations of Europe. As for
coffee
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, the first table shows low-level
coffee
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sales
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increasing in all
five
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countries
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. The UK was the most salient country with 1.5
million
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in 1999 and
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to 20
million
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.
Denmark
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, accounting for 1.8
million
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in 1999, doubled exactly in 2004. In
two
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the two
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places
sales
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increased by the same small amount: 1.8-2
million
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in
Denmark
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and 0.8-1
million
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in
Sweden
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. Meanwhile, in Belgium, there was an increase, from 0.8-1
million
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. In the second table,
although
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the
sales
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of bananas increased in Switzerland, UK, and Belgium, they went down in two other
countries
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(
Sweden
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and
Denmark
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). Swiss
sales
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figures jumped from 15-47
million
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euros
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during these
five
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years,
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in the UK and Belgium
sales
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only grew from 1-5.5 and 0.6-4
million
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respectively.
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,
Sweden
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and
Denmark
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showed a different pattern, with falls in banana
sales
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from 1.8-1 and 2-0.9
million
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euros
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. Comparing the two tables, the
coffee
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sales
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ranged from 0.8-3
million
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euros
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in these
five
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countries
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,
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the range of banana
sales
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figures was from 0.6 to 2
million
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euros
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. By 2004,
sales
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figures for both products had mounted in most
countries
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, except for
Sweden
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and
Denmark
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which recorded drops in banana
sales
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, five, sales, countries, million, denmark, sweden, euros with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "jump" was used 2 times.
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