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Task Achievement
To improve your score in Task Achievement, ensure that you fully address the question by discussing both sides of the argument clearly. Provide a balanced view of the advantages and disadvantages of tourism, with distinct paragraphs for each point.
Task Achievement
Use specific examples to support your points about the impact of tourism on the economy, environment, and culture. This will make your essay more convincing and relevant to the topic.
Coherence & Cohesion
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Coherence & Cohesion
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General
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